Let's take a moment and list what I liked about this fic.
1. FUCKING EVERYTHING
...
Now, for the sake of coherency, let's point out some of my favourite elements of it.
1. Realistic details
Lord knows this is a sadly rare occurrence even with all the research available online. Six hours don't end with a slightly tired person, they end with a shivering mess of a human being that has troubles to think straight, even minus the drugs. Lots of small details, how sensitive Lovino's skin is when Gilbert's sweatshirt touches it, how he is unable to eat even his own pasta sauce, how even blinking hurts. Perfect.
2. Characterisation
I can't decide whom I loved more; Gilbert being impulsive and rough but also overprotective and caring. Francis being seductive and smug but also the voice of reason and the one Lovino needs to hear speaking. Antonio being his dorky, honest self yet showing the possessive, manipulative side of a former empire.
And Lovino, staying true to his stubborn character even as every single bit of his defenses breaks
3. The Safe Word
Just as the above anon mentioned, there is a lingering feeling throughout the whole fic that the safe word is important in some way. It gets repeated in all three points of view, yet is so subtle that the reader, engrossed as he or she is in the story, doesn't offer it much thought, and yet as the final moment comes and Lovino says those three words, it's like a revelation; that was it that's why, now it makes all sense. This sort of narrative skills is something I didn't expect in what was supposed to be a simple smut fic. I DIDN'T EXPECT ANYTHING OF THIS QUALITY AT ALL.
4. The ending
Which was pure perfection and Lovino's “My stupid… fucking idiots…” just felt like a very gentle, very loving punch into feels.
You did a damn good job authornon, and whether you deanon or not, this will be added to a list of true gems of this meme. Go and treat yourself to something nice, you deserved it.
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Re: Safe Word 13/13 Aftercare
(Anonymous) 2013-03-28 07:11 am (UTC)(link)1. FUCKING EVERYTHING
...
Now, for the sake of coherency, let's point out some of my favourite elements of it.
1. Realistic details
Lord knows this is a sadly rare occurrence even with all the research available online. Six hours don't end with a slightly tired person, they end with a shivering mess of a human being that has troubles to think straight, even minus the drugs. Lots of small details, how sensitive Lovino's skin is when Gilbert's sweatshirt touches it, how he is unable to eat even his own pasta sauce, how even blinking hurts. Perfect.
2. Characterisation
I can't decide whom I loved more; Gilbert being impulsive and rough but also overprotective and caring. Francis being seductive and smug but also the voice of reason and the one Lovino needs to hear speaking. Antonio being his dorky, honest self yet showing the possessive, manipulative side of a former empire.
And Lovino, staying true to his stubborn character even as every single bit of his defenses breaks
3. The Safe Word
Just as the above anon mentioned, there is a lingering feeling throughout the whole fic that the safe word is important in some way. It gets repeated in all three points of view, yet is so subtle that the reader, engrossed as he or she is in the story, doesn't offer it much thought, and yet as the final moment comes and Lovino says those three words, it's like a revelation; that was it that's why, now it makes all sense. This sort of narrative skills is something I didn't expect in what was supposed to be a simple smut fic. I DIDN'T EXPECT ANYTHING OF THIS QUALITY AT ALL.
4. The ending
Which was pure perfection and Lovino's “My stupid… fucking idiots…” just felt like a very gentle, very loving punch into feels.
You did a damn good job authornon, and whether you deanon or not, this will be added to a list of true gems of this meme. Go and treat yourself to something nice, you deserved it.