I think this is really cute. And, I'd love to know what's really bothering Matthew. And, I'd also really like to see what would happen when Alfred finally shows up. Or whatever you want to post. Please. Please, please, please post more! Please?
Note: I was just going to post a quick oneshot-sequel, but I decided Fuck it, I want to do an actual chater story for once!! :P So here is the first part of said sequel~) ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Alfred shut the Front door gingerly, being careful not to slam it, a small bottle of maple syrup tucked in his pocket falling to the floor in his distraction, causing him to whine.
"Thats totally not heroic!!" He whined at it as if it could respond.
Arthur, hearing the commotion, peeked out of the kitchen. "Keep it down Git!" He hissed at him.
"But Artiieee!!!"
"What Have I told you about calling me that!!??!"
"It's not proper, not right, blah blah whiny ranty Englishman stuff."
"Why you little!!!"
A voice cut through their squabble. "Non, Non, Non!! This won't do at all! stop Whining like children!!" Francis's voice said, a small pout on the Frenchman's face although there was a stern edge to it. "I Just got Mon Petit Mattheiu to sleep and I wont 'ave 'im woken by you two being stupid!"
"I wasn't being stuuuppiiidddd!!!" Alfred whined, apperently in a childish mood today. "Artie was the one being Dumb!!"
" DONT CALL ME-"
"Hush Angelterre!!!!" Francis snapped, clearly too upset by his son's current condition upstairs to bother with being somewhat nice about it. " And Amerique-"
"Dont call me by that freaky french name!"
"I'll 'ave you know the French language is considered very erotic and beautiful you ungrateful brat!"
There was a small whimper from the top of the stairs.
They had awoken Matthew. ________<3_________
Short, I know. Desole~! I am quite busy at the moment but I had a small spark of inspiration for a small chapter and I figured something was better than nothing, Oui?
Also, Can someone tell me how to make your letters small? I tried something I found on a website to try to make my A/Ns small on my post of the original story but, while they appeared small on the preview, they did not when I actually posted it? Help, por favor?
Author!Anon-- Thank you so much!! I had read to use < font size= + or - # > text here < /font > w/o spaces.....and it showed up correctly on the preview but...Bah.... and yep, Im working on another piece for this, It should be up later today!
Alfred gave him a small smile. "Hey bro. Feeling any better?"
Matthew sniffled, but nodded a little.
"Need a heroic hug?"
Matthew blushed softly, but gave a tiny nod. When Alfred opened his arms with a tiny smile, he ran down the steps and dove into them, causing Alfred to give a (what he claimed to be heroic) yelp of surprise, barely able to stop from falling over. "Easy bro"
His only response was a tiny sniffle as he nuzzled his brothers collarbone, followed by a tiny sneeze.
"What are you even doing out of bed bro? You're not heroic enough to be running around sick."
He snorted, slightly amused. "If I'm not a hero, What am I?"
Alfred thought for a moment, smirking softly. "A damsel in distress"
"Alfred!!"
The personification for America only laughed.
"Asshole."
"Nuh uh."
"Yes-Huh!"
He pouted. "You're so mean to me..."
"I kno-" he was cut off by a tiny fit of coughing.
Francis frowned, Having been chasing Arthur around with a can of Febreze (Air Freshener), Having smelled something terrible . "Mon Cher, You should be lying down!"
Matthew smiled sheepishly at the gentle scolding.
Alfred gave a mischievous Smirk. "Well then, Up we go!" He said, leaning down to swoop Matthew into his arms Bridal-Style.
Matthew squeaked. "Put me dooowwwnnnn!!!"
Alfred Ignored him, running down the stairs.
The last thing either of them heard from France and England was France gasping in Horror when the smoke alarm went off. "THAT WAS WHAT THAT 'ORRIBLE SMELL WAS!!!"
"GAHHHH WATCH WHAT YOU"RE DOING FROG YOU GOT THAT BLOODY SHIT IN MY EYE!!!"
"Desole Mon cher!!"
"GAH!!! YOU GOT IT IN MY MOUTH!!! PUT THE DAMN THING DOWN!! IT TASTES WORSE THAN WHAT YOU BLOODY FUCKING GITS HAVE SAID MY COOKING DOES!!"
"......Cheri, Nothing could Taste that terrible....Absolutely nothing."
_________End of Chapter One__________ What did you think? Was it alright? I had an odd moment of wanting Humor, Hence the France/England Scene
1stanon back with a comment for the new parts. Yay! New parts! I like the sequel. It seemed bit out of sequence or something at first, but then I caught on to what was happening. I'm really enjoying it. Humor is always nice to break things up. Is Matthew sick only or are there other problems going on that are bothering him that has him wanting Alfred? What else is Alfred going to do to help Matthew? Neither of those two questions are critiques or anything of the sort, I'm merely curious and wondering what is going to happen next.
I am wondering about the all caps though. I think you can get the point across just fine with exclamation points or clues in the action. But, as far as fanfiction is concerned, it's a personal thing.
Author!anon Um yeah... Sorry about the random caps and the yelling in all caps but I wanted to draw attention to the fact they were really /yelling/ and throwing a fit instead of just a heated argument. ^^' working on another part, very busy with a lot of projects though so no promises for how fast they'll be out....
Author! Anon here. I don't know... I just.... I don;t really have the inspiration to continue and I'm really kind of not feeling very confident about this piece (seeing as how most comments referred to my grammar and/or writing style and...I just really do not feel like continuing at the current time seeing as how I do not think there is exactly a demand for it at the moment (not that I was expecting one, my writing sucks) and...I get discouraged easily due to low self esteem. perhaps I shall continue after school is out, but until then, I am taking a hiatus on this, perhaps even until after school ends~ I still love you all, especially anyone who actually bothered reading this....
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Re: Rockabye Baby (2/2)
(Anonymous) 2013-03-15 01:43 am (UTC)(link)And, yes, a lullaby would be fantastic.
Whatever you post, I'd welcome reading. ^_^
Re: Rockabye Baby (2/2)
(Anonymous) 2013-03-15 06:04 am (UTC)(link)Holy crap I wasn't expecting anyone to actually comment! *hugs* I'll post a sequel as soon as I get it done~!
Rockabye Baby requested sequel- Brother Mine (1a/?)
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Alfred shut the Front door gingerly, being careful not to slam it, a small bottle of maple syrup tucked in his pocket falling to the floor in his distraction, causing him to whine.
"Thats totally not heroic!!" He whined at it as if it could respond.
Arthur, hearing the commotion, peeked out of the kitchen. "Keep it down Git!" He hissed at him.
"But Artiieee!!!"
"What Have I told you about calling me that!!??!"
"It's not proper, not right, blah blah whiny ranty Englishman stuff."
"Why you little!!!"
A voice cut through their squabble. "Non, Non, Non!! This won't do at all! stop Whining like children!!" Francis's voice said, a small pout on the Frenchman's face although there was a stern edge to it. "I Just got Mon Petit Mattheiu to sleep and I wont 'ave 'im woken by you two being stupid!"
"I wasn't being stuuuppiiidddd!!!" Alfred whined, apperently in a childish mood today. "Artie was the one being Dumb!!"
" DONT CALL ME-"
"Hush Angelterre!!!!" Francis snapped, clearly too upset by his son's current condition upstairs to bother with being somewhat nice about it. " And Amerique-"
"Dont call me by that freaky french name!"
"I'll 'ave you know the French language is considered very erotic and beautiful you ungrateful brat!"
There was a small whimper from the top of the stairs.
They had awoken Matthew.
________<3_________
Short, I know. Desole~! I am quite busy at the moment but I had a small spark of inspiration for a small chapter and I figured something was better than nothing, Oui?
Also, Can someone tell me how to make your letters small? I tried something I found on a website to try to make my A/Ns small on my post of the original story but, while they appeared small on the preview, they did not when I actually posted it? Help, por favor?
Re: Rockabye Baby requested sequel- Brother Mine (1a/?)
(Anonymous) 2013-03-16 03:28 am (UTC)(link)Also, the coding to make text small is < small >< /small >, no spaces. Hope that helps! (:
Re: Rockabye Baby requested sequel- Brother Mine (1a/?)
(Anonymous) 2013-03-16 08:09 pm (UTC)(link)Thank you so much!! I had read to use < font size= + or - # > text here < /font > w/o spaces.....and it showed up correctly on the preview but...Bah.... and yep, Im working on another piece for this, It should be up later today!
Rockabye Baby requested sequel- Brother Mine (1B/?)
(Anonymous) 2013-03-16 08:47 pm (UTC)(link)Matthew sniffled, but nodded a little.
"Need a heroic hug?"
Matthew blushed softly, but gave a tiny nod. When Alfred opened his arms with a tiny smile, he ran down the steps and dove into them, causing Alfred to give a (what he claimed to be heroic) yelp of surprise, barely able to stop from falling over. "Easy bro"
His only response was a tiny sniffle as he nuzzled his brothers collarbone, followed by a tiny sneeze.
"What are you even doing out of bed bro? You're not heroic enough to be running around sick."
He snorted, slightly amused. "If I'm not a hero, What am I?"
Alfred thought for a moment, smirking softly. "A damsel in distress"
"Alfred!!"
The personification for America only laughed.
"Asshole."
"Nuh uh."
"Yes-Huh!"
He pouted. "You're so mean to me..."
"I kno-" he was cut off by a tiny fit of coughing.
Francis frowned, Having been chasing Arthur around with a can of Febreze (Air Freshener), Having smelled something terrible . "Mon Cher, You should be lying down!"
Matthew smiled sheepishly at the gentle scolding.
Alfred gave a mischievous Smirk. "Well then, Up we go!" He said, leaning down to swoop Matthew into his arms Bridal-Style.
Matthew squeaked. "Put me dooowwwnnnn!!!"
Alfred Ignored him, running down the stairs.
The last thing either of them heard from France and England was France gasping in Horror when the smoke alarm went off. "THAT WAS WHAT THAT 'ORRIBLE SMELL WAS!!!"
"GAHHHH WATCH WHAT YOU"RE DOING FROG YOU GOT THAT BLOODY SHIT IN MY EYE!!!"
"Desole Mon cher!!"
"GAH!!! YOU GOT IT IN MY MOUTH!!! PUT THE DAMN THING DOWN!! IT TASTES WORSE THAN WHAT YOU BLOODY FUCKING GITS HAVE SAID MY COOKING DOES!!"
"......Cheri, Nothing could Taste that terrible....Absolutely nothing."
_________End of Chapter One__________
What did you think? Was it alright? I had an odd moment of wanting Humor, Hence the France/England Scene
Re: Rockabye Baby requested sequel- Brother Mine (1B/?)
(Anonymous) 2013-03-16 09:00 pm (UTC)(link)Re: Rockabye Baby requested sequel- Brother Mine (1B/?)
(Anonymous) 2013-03-17 01:40 pm (UTC)(link)I know, I tend do do that....desole... ^^'))
Re: Rockabye Baby requested sequel- Brother Mine (1B/?)
(Anonymous) 2013-03-18 12:30 am (UTC)(link)I am wondering about the all caps though. I think you can get the point across just fine with exclamation points or clues in the action. But, as far as fanfiction is concerned, it's a personal thing.
Re: Rockabye Baby requested sequel- Brother Mine (1B/?)
(Anonymous) 2013-03-19 06:46 pm (UTC)(link)Um yeah... Sorry about the random caps and the yelling in all caps but I wanted to draw attention to the fact they were really /yelling/ and throwing a fit instead of just a heated argument. ^^' working on another part, very busy with a lot of projects though so no promises for how fast they'll be out....
Re: Rockabye Baby requested sequel- Brother Mine (1B/?)
(Anonymous) 2013-04-30 12:38 am (UTC)(link)<3~~ Author!Anon