Not too much to say about this one. This chapter is a bit of a set up chapter, so details will come back here. Also a bit more emotional. Alfred’s first saving someone without his superstrength, although it doesn’t go quite as planned… All three movies feature happy rain at the end. Also, dragon religion!
To you three who commented: Thanks a ton! I’m so glad this is so well received. Your questions will be answered in time! You keep me writing! (And I loved the cupcakes!)
I also have art for this, if you want me to post it. It helps me to see the characters when I write. There haven’t been very many visual details, as this is Alfred’s POV, and he doesn’t focus much on more than a few features. Instead of focusing on how things look, he focuses on how things move. When the narration changes, the detail selection will change as well. So if you want now to see how the characters look, give word!
Puzzle for this one: What is the instrument that Alfred shoots first?
You can sap the fellow from his strength, but you can't keep him from trying to be a hero. That's the core of this whole fill, and I liked this little example of it that it's still such a strength (and somewhat of a flaw) of his character). The scene with the dryads and the satyrs reminded me of "Fantasia." That is kind of the music that I imagined too, though I'm not sure why, since I have a very large collection of Celtic music.
All in all this was a pretty good set up chapter, I think that's because of the little action scene you gave Alfred. And, I loved Alfred's little internal monologue when he was being giggled at. It told a lot about his relationship with Arthur as well. That's one of my favorite thinks about your writing; you can be overtly writing about something but reference a lot of other things in the process that are still valuable pieces of information. And, it shows that he's so happy with his Arthur. This whole update has got my contemplating things that I can't quite put into words just yet.
As for your question: I think it is a viola. I think he would have recognised a cello as what it was, because you don't hold them the same way.
Even though they didn't in this part, I think it would be fun if the trees really did move. Never mind me though, that's the Lord of the Rings geek coming out in me...and you, well Alfred, brought it up first.
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Crowe 7g/?
(Anonymous) 2012-08-07 09:49 pm (UTC)(link)To you three who commented: Thanks a ton! I’m so glad this is so well received. Your questions will be answered in time! You keep me writing! (And I loved the cupcakes!)
I also have art for this, if you want me to post it. It helps me to see the characters when I write. There haven’t been very many visual details, as this is Alfred’s POV, and he doesn’t focus much on more than a few features. Instead of focusing on how things look, he focuses on how things move. When the narration changes, the detail selection will change as well. So if you want now to see how the characters look, give word!
Puzzle for this one: What is the instrument that Alfred shoots first?
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Re: Crowe 7g/?
(Anonymous) 2012-08-07 10:52 pm (UTC)(link)Dunno, Alfie got lucky there. Angry satyrs can be nasty. The giggling trees was funny, though.
Re: Crowe 7g/?
(Anonymous) 2012-08-08 01:03 am (UTC)(link)This was a wonderful chapter! I love how Alfred's hero instinct is still intact even if he doesn't have his strength. Great job, keep it up!
Re: Crowe 7g/?
(Anonymous) 2012-08-08 01:43 pm (UTC)(link)All in all this was a pretty good set up chapter, I think that's because of the little action scene you gave Alfred. And, I loved Alfred's little internal monologue when he was being giggled at. It told a lot about his relationship with Arthur as well. That's one of my favorite thinks about your writing; you can be overtly writing about something but reference a lot of other things in the process that are still valuable pieces of information. And, it shows that he's so happy with his Arthur. This whole update has got my contemplating things that I can't quite put into words just yet.
As for your question: I think it is a viola. I think he would have recognised a cello as what it was, because you don't hold them the same way.
Even though they didn't in this part, I think it would be fun if the trees really did move. Never mind me though, that's the Lord of the Rings geek coming out in me...and you, well Alfred, brought it up first.