I really like this so far, an hope to see more in the future! You've set up an intriguing start, and I can't wait to see how Alfred and Ivan interact with one another.
One thing though--There are a few odd turns of phrases in this that make the story harder to understand as well as a few grammar mistakes.
Looking forward to more~!
capcha: political blockade. Well, that's what Alfred is trying to do, capcha!
Re: At Word's End -- Part 1c
(Anonymous) 2010-01-24 03:31 am (UTC)(link)One thing though--There are a few odd turns of phrases in this that make the story harder to understand as well as a few grammar mistakes.
Looking forward to more~!
capcha: political blockade. Well, that's what Alfred is trying to do, capcha!