First of all I have to say that this just blew me away. Your writing is so strong.
When I got to "and Canada looked just like his brother. Only America's eyes were full of fire, blue flames and heat like the sun, and Canada's were blue ice, snow and frost and the killing cold both he and Russia walked with," I actually had to get up from my chair and go into the other room. It was because of the pacing, I think -- the gradual crescendo of emotions -- that would probably be why this line hit me so hard.
The only thing that bothered me a bit is what came after that. I love how you gave Matthew a backbone. I love how you made Canada and America newly-reconciled brothers. The only thing is when you're talking about the fire and ice in their eyes, it feels like you're saying that they are the same. And it's such a large part of Canadian identity to deny that.
...then again, maybe that's what makes this story so powerful.
*wibbles* I can't believe how much love this piece is getting from people, and how awesome it feels to read comments like yours. To know something _I_ wrote affected people like that? Headrush. Thank you, thank you, thank you for that comment. ♥
As to the fire and ice, it's a bit hard to articulate my thoughts on it, but it's not so much that they're the same as they're ...linked? They're not all one or the other, America's not all hot-headed and Canada's not all cool politeness, they're both more nuanced than that. I get what you're saying, though.
Another thing I'd love to write is how easy it would be for Canada to lose himself in his brother, because I think it would be? And I kind of wanted to show that. But he walks that line, and America (Hetalia-wise especially) is so eager to be closer to his brother...lots of thoughts swirling around in my head, making for perhaps not so clear writngs, but I`m so thrilled you liked it enough to leave a long comment.
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Re: Twin Eagles II
(Anonymous) 2009-04-06 04:42 pm (UTC)(link)When I got to "and Canada looked just like his brother. Only America's eyes were full of fire, blue flames and heat like the sun, and Canada's were blue ice, snow and frost and the killing cold both he and Russia walked with," I actually had to get up from my chair and go into the other room. It was because of the pacing, I think -- the gradual crescendo of emotions -- that would probably be why this line hit me so hard.
The only thing that bothered me a bit is what came after that. I love how you gave Matthew a backbone. I love how you made Canada and America newly-reconciled brothers. The only thing is when you're talking about the fire and ice in their eyes, it feels like you're saying that they are the same. And it's such a large part of Canadian identity to deny that.
...then again, maybe that's what makes this story so powerful.
Re: Twin Eagles II
(Anonymous) 2009-04-06 05:03 pm (UTC)(link)As to the fire and ice, it's a bit hard to articulate my thoughts on it, but it's not so much that they're the same as they're ...linked? They're not all one or the other, America's not all hot-headed and Canada's not all cool politeness, they're both more nuanced than that. I get what you're saying, though.
Another thing I'd love to write is how easy it would be for Canada to lose himself in his brother, because I think it would be? And I kind of wanted to show that. But he walks that line, and America (Hetalia-wise especially) is so eager to be closer to his brother...lots of thoughts swirling around in my head, making for perhaps not so clear writngs, but I`m so thrilled you liked it enough to leave a long comment.