Anon enjoyed this immensely, but would like to point out some errors:
-tense shifts! (Belgium cries then cried?) -Belgian is the name for the people, not "Belgium" -Some wording was super-awkward -Lone trumpet is playing ITS last stand
but these are things you can totally fix. The fic itself was strong, and that's the most important thing. :) Good work.
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Re: In Flanders Field [1/1]
(Anonymous) 2009-03-12 01:43 pm (UTC)(link)-tense shifts! (Belgium cries then cried?)
-Belgian is the name for the people, not "Belgium"
-Some wording was super-awkward
-Lone trumpet is playing ITS last stand
but these are things you can totally fix. The fic itself was strong, and that's the most important thing. :) Good work.
Re: In Flanders Field [1/1]
(Anonymous) 2009-03-12 04:23 pm (UTC)(link)sorry about those v.v
glad you enjoyed despite them all ^^