Someone wrote in [personal profile] hetalia_kink 2013-04-07 08:47 pm (UTC)

Author!Anon

Wow, thank you for such a long comment! I'm afraid I posted the next part before I could read it, but I'll use your advice the next time!

Crap, just when you mention how I keep things realistic, I went with a pretty unrealistic way of getting into Ukraine's closet. Honestly, I couldn't figure out a way for Lithuania to make it there before Turkey and Ukraine unnoticed, while talking to Belarus. Hopefully it's just that one stretch.

I'm perfectly fine with constructive criticism! I'm hardly ever given criticism for my creative writing in school, so it's great to get some!
1. Yeah, I see what you mean. I'm always forgetting which words should have a comma after it and which don't need one.
2. Oh God, even my teacher says that I need to stop rambling in my writing. I'll try to keep that in check.
3. Noted. I was wondering whether or not I needed capitals. Thanks for the correction.
4. Alright, I'll stick with Natalya then, unless Russia's around. Poke me if I forget.

Haha, will do! I'm still on the fence about using Ukraine or Turkey's perspective as well, or keeping it to the voyeurs. I'd be interested in your opinion on this.

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