Anon, I'll be honest with you, but only because you welcomed criticism. You have promise, but your ideas are scattered and it almost seems like you're playing this entirely by ear. I'd recommend working on your style a bit. And I'd also suggest taking the time to write a few chapters in advance so you can go back and restructure things as you need to. It is worth the longer wait for an update if it's in the name of writing for better quality. I can't be the only one who thinks this, and I'm saying this only because I see that you have the potential to improve.