Thank God the other anon said it first. I read this fic a few days ago and it bugged me then because of that particular issue, but I've got a few more points to add. Correct me if I'm wrong because I'm not American, but didn't Canada try to help Britain keep America?
Also, again, don't know much about the Revolution, but America's speech in reaction to the riot just... boggled me. I can't see England being so cold towards America concerning the riot death; England was always kind to America and genuinely cared about him, albeit in his own unique way. I'm not even English and that bit made me feel indignant.
And this: "but if we don’t get more land, then Spain and France would get it instead and we can’t let that happen, for England’s sake". What? Feel free to correct me if I'm wrong because I accept I don't know that much about the time period, but I think Manifest Destiny had a bit more to do with the persecution of Native Americans than 'the Evil Empire', didn't it?
Technically, your writing is fine, nothing wrong with it in terms of grammar, spelling, etc, but the way you handled such an issue put me right off.
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Also, again, don't know much about the Revolution, but America's speech in reaction to the riot just... boggled me. I can't see England being so cold towards America concerning the riot death; England was always kind to America and genuinely cared about him, albeit in his own unique way. I'm not even English and that bit made me feel indignant.
And this: "but if we don’t get more land, then Spain and France would get it instead and we can’t let that happen, for England’s sake". What? Feel free to correct me if I'm wrong because I accept I don't know that much about the time period, but I think Manifest Destiny had a bit more to do with the persecution of Native Americans than 'the Evil Empire', didn't it?
Technically, your writing is fine, nothing wrong with it in terms of grammar, spelling, etc, but the way you handled such an issue put me right off.