One thing though; Sweden is striking me as a bit creepy. Maybe it's just because you're writing for the audience of a particular kink that I don't share, but someone fetishizing a part of somebody else (in this case, Finland's new chub), rather than thinking about that part in terms of what they already love about that person, isn't the coziest thing for me.
I want to be getting a sweet, gentle vibe from Sweden throughout, rather than the "OMNOMNOM DELICIOUS PUDGE" vibe I'm getting from some lines in this fic.
That's all the beef (lol) I have with this, though; if I just "don't get it", ignore me; I'll be over here waiting eagerly for the next update no matter what!
Re: Sight of You [3/?]
One thing though; Sweden is striking me as a bit creepy. Maybe it's just because you're writing for the audience of a particular kink that I don't share, but someone fetishizing a part of somebody else (in this case, Finland's new chub), rather than thinking about that part in terms of what they already love about that person, isn't the coziest thing for me.
I want to be getting a sweet, gentle vibe from Sweden throughout, rather than the "OMNOMNOM DELICIOUS PUDGE" vibe I'm getting from some lines in this fic.
That's all the beef (lol) I have with this, though; if I just "don't get it", ignore me; I'll be over here waiting eagerly for the next update no matter what!